السبت، 23 أكتوبر 2010






Women's work


          For a long time women have been prevented from maintaining their rights in education and work. Their parents and even their husbands thought that woman's main task is to do the household tasks and raise the children. Later came "kasem amin" asking for the women's right to learn. Then there were many women's liberation movements for maintaining their rights in society and working was one of these rights. Although many years have passed, there are still different considerations between supporting and refusing women's work.
        

          Some people support the idea that women's work is important for many reasons.One of them is increasing the family's income as woman's salary, besides her husband's, can grantee a better life for their children. The working woman shares in developing the society by her work as a teacher, a doctor, or an engineer, etc. Woman also can acquire self-sufficiency and self-confidence as she depends on herself to solve any problem she faces.


          Other people refuse the idea of women's work considering that working is only for men. One reason for refusing women's work is neglecting her household tasks, husband and children as being busy at work. Another reason is that some employers refuse to employ women as they have fewer abilities than men in working. Also the working woman is always tired because of taking care of both her family and work. So, by the end of the day she becomes very tired to have some time for her own to rest or do whatever she wants.


          I believe that everything in our life has its advantages and disadvantages. So, I agree with women's work apart from its disadvantages. There are many women who have achieved a great success in their work although they had families to take care of. One of them was "dr/ Aisha Abdel Rahman" who succeeded to fight for her father's refusal of her education and became a great writer and lecturer.


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  1. A good draft. Your content is sufficient and your organization opf the paragraph is good. But there are some corrections such as:
    1. Their parents and even their husbands thought that woman's main task is to do the household (tasks) and raise (the ) children. Later came "kasem amin" asking for (the) women's right to learn. Then there were many women's liberation movements for maintaining (their ) (women's) rights in society(.) (and ) working was (is) one of these rights. Although many years have passed, there are still
    2. One of them(these reasons) is increasing the family's income as woman's
    3. One of them was "dr/ Aisha Abdel Rahman" who succeeded to fight for her father's refusal of her education and became a great writer and lecturer(a very good example to support your point of view)

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  2. Choose three or more of your friends and send comments on their drafts.

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  3. Hi Wafaa, your essay is very good .The ideas are clear.I like your introduction a lot. in the body you gave clear evidences and reasons . you wrote more than one example.finally, you gave a clear idea about your opinion.good work from Good girl

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  4. Your essay is really excellent. It has clear idea. Your introduction is very attractive. In the body, your sentences are direct. It includes various opinions and reasons for it. Your vocabularies are precise and clear. In Your conclusion, you give a good example. so totally your essay is very interesting .

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  5. Hi wafaa,very good draft your introduction is strong ,your opinion is very clear and provided with examples.
    good work and good luck with the final draft

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  6. Wonderful essay Fofa .I like your way of writing this essay as you wrote it in the way of objectively. Also , it has a specific purpose . it has a clear main idea. Your introduction and conclusion are interested. the ideas are organized . your sentences are clear

    very good essay my friend Fofa . Allah protects you

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